ARK OF STILLNESS

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fikrah
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Tue Apr 27, 2010 10:12 am

You stay in the ark of stillness,

Long after the floods dried out

In tiny compartments, your generation suffers

Scared to come out

Scared to peep out

Souls starving, minds starving, bodies starving

Of the aforesaid – scarcity in plenty,

You were robbed, I understand – enslaved

And left at the mercy of inferiority complex

Upon alien culture of the uncultured,

For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass

But on shards of broken glass

Walk! And when you fall, they force you to your feet

Again and again; to them what a feat!

Like the overseers of your journey to Golgotha.

How your past remain so glorious and resplendent

Your kingdoms great, of knowledge transcendent

Let it trickle like water droplets

To quench generation’s mind thirst.

To awaken the warrior spirit in us

Arrows and spears, more casualties

For they shall no longer live on their knees!
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Tue Apr 27, 2010 12:46 pm

[quote name="fikrah"]You stay in the ark of stillness,

Long after the floods dried out

In tiny compartments, your generation suffers

Scared to come out

Scared to peep out

Souls starving, minds starving, bodies starving[/quote]

THIS OPENER got me wow!its like being taken back in time yet its something contemporary!damn,its a challenge to all us....

[quote name="fikrah"]scarcity in plenty, 8)

You were robbed (they took our treasures,installed them in their own countries then claim,they pioneered education and all! they suffer from superiority complex!

I understand – enslaved

And left at the mercy of inferiority complex

Upon alien culture of the uncultured,

For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass

But on shards of broken glass[/quote] :idea:

neo-colonialism,controlled by the systems they infiltrated and power comes from above,from financial to political control!we say, they determine.they determine they incorporate!!damn!!slavery!!

THIS some deep shit mein!i love these lines.actually my favorite lines in the piece!

[quote name="fikrah"]Walk! And when you fall, they force you to your feet

Again and again; to them what a feat![/quote] :cry:

[quote name="fikrah"]Like the overseers of your journey to Golgotha.

How your past remain so glorious and respondent

Your kingdoms great trickle like water droplets

To quench generation’s mind thirst.

To awaken the warrior spirit in us

Arrows and spears, more casualties

For they shall no longer live on their knees![/quote]

that finishing made all round summary to the challenge of working hard to free ourselves to these invisible chains :wink:

deep piece cuz!!
fikrah
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Tue Apr 27, 2010 5:31 pm

thanks mc qham...you know what it is...word brotha!!!
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Wed Apr 28, 2010 9:34 am

I thot I commented on this?!...ok...

First the subject is poetry in itself...it puts a very interestin twist to the biblical ark as we know it...it was made to shelter and protect life from destruction...but the "stillness" part of it is wat gives this piece its flavor...

[quote name="fikrah"]You stay in the ark of stillness,

Long after the floods dried out

In tiny compartments, your generation suffers[/quote]wat is made to save u turns against u'...its an horrific experience n' its happening everyday everywhere on this planet earth!

[quote name="fikrah"]Of the aforesaid – scarcity in plenty,[/quote]Well thot!...I wish I wrote that myself...I envy!!!

[quote name="fikrah"]For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass

But on shards of broken glass[/quote]Did anyone say that out loud like I did?!...n' felt the flow n' rhyme in it?!...thats a special delivery which carries alot of weight in it...

[quote name="fikrah"]How your past remain so glorious and resplendent

Your kingdoms great, of knowledge transcendent

Let it trickle like water droplets

To quench generation’s mind thirst.

To awaken the warrior spirit in us

Arrows and spears, more casualties

For they shall no longer live on their knees![/quote]Now that's a courageous write...I like the ending for the strength it leaves me with.

Nice write bro!...keep more comin'.

Peace.
fikrah
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Wed Apr 28, 2010 10:25 am

couz...yeah yeah...mad love alwayz....big up big bro. word!!!
tha high priest
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Sat May 01, 2010 7:54 pm

Man thats a deep poem.Its actually the reality we still mentally enslaved,economically,culturally.But we gotta keep our minds opened to enable freedom.Nway nice piece.
fikrah
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Sun May 02, 2010 4:11 pm

thanks high priest...you are a bratha 4 real, can't forget when we met...a bratha so down-to-earth. blessings and peace!!!
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Mon May 03, 2010 3:29 pm

i like the fact that u av taken our minds to a place where poets like my not sooo humble self tend to avoid!

welcome to AHH. i see u already know poets here...
fikrah
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Wed May 05, 2010 8:31 pm

i appreciate your support brothers, mc qham and brooks big up men...am proud at the same time humbled to be part of AHH...I read the rules and promise to comment on other poets work on AHH...soon as possible...thanks people!!!
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