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The NomadPoet
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 10:55 am

Serpent gods

Merchant lords

Urban sloths

Curtain talk

Indiscreet or

In secret

Covert or

Open

Enigmatic research

Clandestine operations

Divide and conquer

Rule & oppress

Mind control

Blind patrol

Find your soul

And never again let go

Brainwashed

Indoctrinated

Manipulated

Genetically degenerated

Open your eyes & open them wide

Release your chakras & loosen your mind

Become one with Mother Earth

Become undone for the first time since after birth

L?
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 8:02 pm

I see alot of awakening in this write!...its like gettin up from a mind slumber to realize the mess around you...finding out that everything is not wut it seems to be anymore...everything is in a mess...thanks for this piece NomadPoet...
The NomadPoet
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Wed Oct 14, 2009 10:08 am

Yes I

Been gwaning thru a transformation recently, My lil baby girl turned two months yesterday & me cousin committed suicide on Sunday morning, so it kinda made me realise how tings aint just black & white.

There is a grey area in between good & bad & seems to me Humanity been trapped in dat area, seen?

Selah
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Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:21 pm

the wordplay is outstanding. Gots to say that before i comment on what the poem is about.

[quote name="The NomadPoet"]Mind control

Blind patrol

Find your soul

And never again let go[/quote]

vnorm just paused and read that again!

[quote name="The NomadPoet"]Open your eyes & open them wide

Release your chakras & loosen your mind

Become one with Mother Earth

Become undone for the first time since after birth[/quote]

sounds like a call for us to give up the rigidity of seeing things in either/or's and become more 'amorphous' and able to flow in between the cracks that divide the two.

deep.
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 2:13 pm

nice write, though am still caught up with the child and cousin thing,

dam what a paradox!
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Wed Oct 21, 2009 4:24 pm

@ cornelius

Yes I, seems like the more we give the more we take....

Thanx for feedback everyone.. :D
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Indiscreet or

In secret

Covert or

Open

i loved it. the precence of alitteration and supreme rhme scheme plus wordplay

finalized by the similar covert or open ...describes my argumental state at most times word...
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It aint all it seems but e problem is it all seems good

It all smells sweet but pay attention coz that aint food

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It aint all it seems but e problem is it all seems good

It all smells sweet but pay attention coz that aint food

MetamorFik
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Thu Oct 29, 2009 12:43 pm

[quote name="Fik"]It aint all it seems but e problem is it all seems good

It all smells sweet but pay attention coz that aint food[/quote]

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