Scents of senselessness...

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vnorm
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Wed Mar 12, 2008 10:22 am

Its amazing how things can change in matters of moments. Friends turn to foe's politics become religions. Innocents killed. You’ve stirred up alot of emotion in this piece

Africa Unite

Blessed be to all

bow. word.
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Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:16 am

the first time i read this, it was kenya that got to ma mind. nice piece bro
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Sat Mar 15, 2008 9:13 am

I feel you hommy, trust me. I was there when all that scent filled the air, but on reading this piece, I can actually see the wounds. Keep the peace and truth alive. Would also love to see you reciting this piece, why don't you come to Kwani openmic at club Sounds or Nu-metro Poet's club at the junction? ONE
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Wed May 14, 2008 3:38 pm

[quote name="vnorm"]Satan is here, i swear i see his face as he sneers

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The 'great' and his peers are safe in some place as the tears

of the common man bleeds
. Blood's fresher in here.

The Displaced cant afford a wash,their scent's in the air

Neck n his ears got wounds.

The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further

This tribe despise the other, It's why they fight it harder.

Slaying hope.

Live bullets sprayin folks

Pained souls. Revenge calls.

Love erases like pencils.

The shepherd is here.[/quote]

I really think i should start watching TV oftenly. Then maybe i would know more of what you reflect here. Otherwise, i wouldn't say this is a great piece. You're reflecting something that is a wound to someone else, even you for that matter. Props on that reflection. As stated earlier...Africa Unite!
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Thu May 22, 2008 11:33 am

Wow, This a dope piece!

indeed Satan was present durin the kenyan crisis, the stench of death, destruction and hate marked his presence...
The 'great' and his peers are safe in some place as the tears

of the common man bleeds
The politicians, shamelessly safe as their supporters die for them. African politics!
The Displaced cant afford a wash,their scent's in the air
i think this cud mean what it literally means, that the people, displaced by poverty and chaos of the crisis are unable to wash away the blood and dirt, the stench of death on them, but i think it also means the politicians can afford to wash their hands of the whole situation, (like pilot on the issue of the crucification of Jesus) but the people cant, cuz datz their life, they cant afford to simply wash their hands of the whole situation, cant simply forget there is a situation...the situation of poverty, opportunities to some simply on their tribe, discrimination between tribes...
The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further

This tribe despise the other, It's why they fight it harder.
True dat, True dat! and what a shame it is...

buh i like the sense of hope it ends on!

Africa, we gonna work thro all dis, got a long way 2 go buh we'll get here..

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Thu May 22, 2008 12:36 pm

can't say much more than what's already been said. But yea, this is heavy.

The rhyme scheme is a rather complex one to maintain throughout... And you never once sacrificed sense and meaning for its sake. Consistent intensity,

So nicely done :wink:

bless
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