Scents of senselessness...

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vnorm
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 10:15 am

Satan is here, i swear i see his face as he sneers

Death has been here,its scent has been dang'rously near

Neighbors with spears evicting fellow neighbors. its wierd.

Men are in fear 'coz almost every face has been pierced.

The 'great' and his peers are safe in some place as the tears

of the common man bleeds. Blood's fresher in here.

The Displaced cant afford a wash,their scent's in the air

Neck n his ears got wounds. there's a smell as he nears.

Be'wrecking news, CNN, the world shakes as it hears.

The hate is getting new. See an end? Never, we fear.

Silent inside tents. Cited killers claim they incited.

This life is priceless; even ghosts dislike the lifeless!

The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further

This tribe despise the other, It's why they fight it harder.

Slaying hope.

Live bullets sprayin folks

Pained souls. Revenge calls.

Love erases like pencils.

The shepherd is here.
concrete
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Tue Feb 05, 2008 4:42 pm

Satan is here, i swear i see his face as he sneers
Powerful intro.
Men are in fear 'coz almost every face has been pierced.

The 'great' and his peers are safe in some place as the tears

of the common man bleeds. Blood's fresher in here.

Silent inside tents. Cited killers claim they incited.

This life is priceless; even ghosts dislike the lifeless!

The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further
Its amazing how u can put all that into poetry. I can almos smell the

scent of blood, the scent of death. Your last line ,"The shepherd is here" brings

this strong 'scent " of hope. I hope that was your intention when u ended it this

way. this about the situation in Kenya right, its powerful how managed to word

it all into one powerful piece.

Keep inking blood, sometimes its the only thing that keeps us sane.

Much luv.
africanseed
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Fri Feb 08, 2008 11:38 am

Silent inside tents. Cited killers claim they incited.

This life is priceless; even ghosts dislike the lifeless!

The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further

This tribe despise the other, It's why they fight it harder.

Slaying hope.

Live bullets sprayin folks

Pained souls. Revenge calls.

Love erases like pencils.

The shepherd is here[quote]

ye man i can hear you reciting this one, am feeling u nice one, am loving it.

Gud lukin out, word and shout(Manchild)
vnorm
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Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:09 am

thanks concrete and Seed. ya, thats wasup in Kenya. ppl is dyin
vnorm
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Thu Feb 21, 2008 12:05 pm

we watch calmly while 'peace' trys to creep back.
ghetto queen
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Fri Feb 22, 2008 1:29 am

your words are speaking to me damn i swaer i can hear them.it would b blessed to hear this on stage.The truth....blessed be
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Mon Feb 25, 2008 3:10 pm

Come to ahh for dope depth, i love your thinking.

Great stuff, yo much respect.
ghetto queen
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Wed Mar 05, 2008 2:51 pm

Its amazing how things can change in matters of moments. Friends turn to foe's politics become religions. Innocents killed. You’ve stirred up alot of emotion in this piece

Africa Unite

Blessed be to all
Enigma
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Thu Mar 06, 2008 8:16 am

Magnetic stuff here. Sheer class and pure genius. i was almost thrusted into a lyricist lounge as i read this one.keep em coming please!

Loved these lines.....superb
The hate is getting new. See an end? Never, we fear
The Displaced cant afford a wash,their scent's in the air
This life is priceless; even ghosts dislike the lifeless!

The truth is obvious but these guys disguise it further
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