upon comin thru...
.......................he stepped...
clapped-you, in my palm
maps two, they trapped-Jews
him highly calm, unrapped-news.
so now, to fight-again
saw a clown, light-frame
plain down, his was a tight-game.
see minds who fought fame
quite a lot came, taught the same
continental curriculum, the hot flames.
free-from-cars. weed a norm near bars.
AFREE-KA. seek tha, light
speak life, in a script a week's lines.
then they battled for leadership positions.
...))expansionism-wisdom)))
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antiklokwize
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see minds who fought fame
quite a lot came, taught the same
continental curriculum, the hot flames.
best lines though
that was was crazee bro,i liked the way u rhymed the whole fuckin piece,nice style and good flow
keep it up
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quite a lot came, taught the same
continental curriculum, the hot flames.
best lines though
that was was crazee bro,i liked the way u rhymed the whole fuckin piece,nice style and good flow
keep it up
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Planet Urban
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Nice one.. any more?
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AddictiveSoul
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hmm...
Your style in this piece is definately interesting - all the commas (which sorta dismantled the meaning in the piece, in my opinion) give it a slow, abstract (nice) flow... That being said, I get the the theme you're exploring fair enough, but i don't really understand your context... and some of the wordplay only served to confuzzle me a little more...
But I'm gonna read it again... and again and again,
Right after I move it.
NiceOne
bless
Your style in this piece is definately interesting - all the commas (which sorta dismantled the meaning in the piece, in my opinion) give it a slow, abstract (nice) flow... That being said, I get the the theme you're exploring fair enough, but i don't really understand your context... and some of the wordplay only served to confuzzle me a little more...
But I'm gonna read it again... and again and again,
Right after I move it.
NiceOne
bless
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AddictiveSoul
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hmm...
Your style in this piece is definately interesting - all the commas (which sorta dismantled the meaning in the piece, in my opinion) give it a slow, abstract (nice) flow... That being said, I get the the theme you're exploring fair enough, but i don't really understand your context... and some of the wordplay only served to confuzzle me a little more...
But I'm gonna read it again... and again and again,
Right after I move it.
NiceOne
bless
Your style in this piece is definately interesting - all the commas (which sorta dismantled the meaning in the piece, in my opinion) give it a slow, abstract (nice) flow... That being said, I get the the theme you're exploring fair enough, but i don't really understand your context... and some of the wordplay only served to confuzzle me a little more...
But I'm gonna read it again... and again and again,
Right after I move it.
NiceOne
bless
dat sum dope floetry ryt there!
Damn impressive!
Damn impressive!
i felt it without really gettin it
LoL, i kinda get it,
he talkin about freestyle battles i think, (the clown being his opponent)...a battle of witts n words, "the hot flames"... which is reflected in the quick witty almost improvised flow of the poem...
"AFREE-KA. seek tha, light
speak life, in a script a week's lines."
seek the light, speak life...give life to ur feelings n thoughts through the wordz u use 2 express yourself, poetry. floetry. rap.
:?: :?: :?:
he talkin about freestyle battles i think, (the clown being his opponent)...a battle of witts n words, "the hot flames"... which is reflected in the quick witty almost improvised flow of the poem...
"AFREE-KA. seek tha, light
speak life, in a script a week's lines."
seek the light, speak life...give life to ur feelings n thoughts through the wordz u use 2 express yourself, poetry. floetry. rap.
:?: :?: :?:
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antiklokwize
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word is bond certainly.
you are all in a very rich vein of form.
humbling feedback to say the least.
AddictiveSoul:...your opinion is always welcum sista.
every african who gave response on this thread is super dope no question.
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shout out to Penniak...
you are all in a very rich vein of form.
humbling feedback to say the least.
AddictiveSoul:...your opinion is always welcum sista.
every african who gave response on this thread is super dope no question.
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shout out to Penniak...
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the flow is symbolic it interprets the poem....
nice 1 antiklokwize
i especially liked these lines
see minds who fought fame
quite a lot came, taught the same
continental curriculum, the hot flames.
nice 1 antiklokwize
i especially liked these lines
see minds who fought fame
quite a lot came, taught the same
continental curriculum, the hot flames.
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