do i qualify


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Joined:Tue Sep 18, 2007 10:20 am

Wed Sep 19, 2007 9:32 am

giving myself to you

before even knowing you

do i qualify

i may be ugly as sin

she may possess the beauty of a queen

she can not give you what i can

love full of passion

and i would that you realize

no greater love had you as a man from a woman

than the one i have for you

i put myself before you

with little qualifications that i have

she may beat me with experiance

take your time make up yuor mind and tell me

do i qualify
is jus' me
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Joined:Mon Jul 23, 2007 8:35 pm

Wed Sep 19, 2007 10:55 am

beautiful, simple piece.. bt.. do i sense some resentment to another lady there?, some feeling of inadequacy on ur part? js kdng :lol:

a nice expressive piece that shows how the lady feels in not so many words.
Joined:Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:00 pm

Wed Sep 19, 2007 11:55 am

Ey, Pretty Soulful drop, feels like a spur of the moment thing with some flaws here and there. All the same keep dropping 'em.
ghetto queen
Joined:Mon Aug 07, 2006 12:51 am

Wed Sep 19, 2007 12:26 pm

i like it the subject is very different feeling not good enough is something that all woman and men will feel at some point in thier life!i can relate its a bit simple thou but who said that was a bad thing????
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Joined:Fri Aug 31, 2007 12:36 pm

Wed Oct 03, 2007 5:36 pm

Wow Sista!

This is NYC and nyc is the best word I can come up with because I am not so good with words when it comes to giving compliments.

I feel this but no matter how much you might love him it is safe for you to walk away so that you can protect yourself, I am talking from experience. He will realise later what he has lost and by then it myt be too little too late!! :wink:

Keep putting ink to paper though! :wink:

Joined:Thu May 10, 2007 4:41 pm

Thu Oct 04, 2007 12:40 pm

This struck me as more of a song than a piece...

Simple and kinda effective but, quite honestly, not so captivating...

I second Trace, in that this seems like a spur of the moment piece. You didn't really put your emotions out there... Mentions of "passion" and "love" are all I could pick up... how about expanding on that anger you seem to be holding back against 'the other woman' or describing the length and extent of your love... Or what it is that makes the love you share with the guy so special and worth fighting for...

Just expand.

Sorry to be the chink in your chain...

For what it's worth, I'm sure every lady can definately relate. I sure can.

Welcome to AHH,

Looking forward to reading more of your work :wink:

Keep elevatin'
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