seasons without grain

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kudzie
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 11:12 am

this life that i live

thi effort that i give

so much pain without grain

seasons without rain

meals without grain

but a purpose i do have

there is no life without aim

no picture without name

this is what i am

a prisoner in my own self

i strive without success

though i thrive in distress

this life is a mess

my face is in disgrace

on either side of the equator

lies the capricon and the cancer

on either side of my being

lies hunger and anger

i keep moving its my prayer

my spirit in granduer

my everyday is a wish

a wish my mother was there

to embrace ,comfort me and to care

this life is not fair

from place to place searching

here and there

searching in vain and comig to dispair
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 1:42 pm

love the piece... well written, good concept, flows nicely...

overall its a great piece... loved reading it... gonna read it agian jus cause i can...lol..

~P~E~A~C~E~!
Beesting
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 3:26 pm

Great piece soldier.

seasons without grain

this life that i live

thi effort that i give

so much pain without grain

seasons without rain

meals without grain

but a purpose i do have


there is no life without aim

no picture without name

this is what i am

a prisoner in my own self

i strive without success

though i thrive in distress

this life is a mess

my face is in disgrace


on either side of the equator

lies the capricon and the cancer

on either side of my being

lies hunger and anger


i keep moving its my prayer

my spirit in granduer

my everyday is a wish


a wish my mother was there

to embrace ,comfort me and to care

this life is not fair

from place to place searching

here and there

searching in vain and comig to dispair

Greate piece indeed soldier. Even though we may be going through a lot of pain, we are inspired at the same time. Your poem proves that soldier. And, please, do keep you head and always look back to what you've written, am sure it will give you strenght, the stuff that we all nee main. I feel your piece to the bits of my bone blood. Never give up, always strive man, you will surely thrive dawg. If you think your efforts are unsuccessfull, look back main, you'll see you've done a lot, you've survived a lot main, and you are strong and bold within main, like rubber dawg, just imagine. Sorry about your mums main, she watching upon you main.

Great piece soldier. Keep inkin, never sieze
Beesting
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 3:26 pm

Great piece soldier.
seasons without grain

this life that i live

thi effort that i give

so much pain without grain

seasons without rain

meals without grain

but a purpose i do have


there is no life without aim

no picture without name

this is what i am

a prisoner in my own self

i strive without success

though i thrive in distress

this life is a mess

my face is in disgrace


on either side of the equator

lies the capricon and the cancer

on either side of my being

lies hunger and anger


i keep moving its my prayer

my spirit in granduer

my everyday is a wish


a wish my mother was there

to embrace ,comfort me and to care

this life is not fair

from place to place searching

here and there

searching in vain and comig to dispair
Greate piece indeed soldier. Even though we may be going through a lot of pain, we are inspired at the same time. Your poem proves that soldier. And, please, do keep your head up and always look back to what you've written, am sure it will educate and give you strenght, the stuff that we all need main. I feel your piece to the bits of my bone blood. Never give up, always strive man, you will surely thrive dawg. If you think your efforts are unsuccessfull, look back main, you'll see you've done a lot, you've survived a lot main, and you are strong and bold within main, like rubber dawg, just imagine. Sorry about your mums main, she watching upon you main.

Great piece soldier. Keep inkin, never sieze
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