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Sat Mar 04, 2006 1:43 pm

I am going to perform this in thirty minutes time at the Book Cafe poetry slam here in Harare, Zimbabwe....I just thought I would share...

Meeting you here, in the dark of day

An eagle falls in the space between us,

Knowing this storny ground

only amplifies the fall. It lies there, lifeless.

My first instinct is to nurseit,

But you protest

only to pick it up,

reach out for its fragile wings, plucking them hysterically,

ending its panoramic reverie.

Right then, half-excited, half-scared

I turn and run

gradually I feel the light-footedness, I am flying

You have given me wings

In the confusion I soar, fighting the guilt of the eagle disowned

of giving flight to vision with wings not my own

but from your spot on the ground

you wave assurances, in love's dark sign language

You signal that wounded eagles soon learn how to fly again

Rescued by the enduring memory of luminous clouds

enveloping an interminable eternity of blue sky

As sure as the wind blows, they close their eyes

And soar....

So I watch you from up here

and it occurs to me, I cannot fly now

where you stand is my treading ground, our fortress,

So I quickly home in, enchanted, your image alluring, anticipating....

In a twist of fate I am now falling fast towards stony ground

falling in-bwtween the space betwween you and...

....him

His first instinct is to nurse me

You stop him, protesting

Only to pick me up, reach out for my fragile wings,

plucking my feathers, hysterically,

ending my panoramic reverie...I lie there lifeless

He turns to run

and gradually the light footednesshe is flying
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Sat Mar 04, 2006 7:11 pm

SH-t, I JAS CAN'T find the right words!!!! Deep stuff man.

Jas don know if i interpreted it right.

THE connection between the 1st and the last stanza, more like

the,"what goes around comes around kindo thang".Guess u never

thot what happened to the first eagle would sooner or later happen

to you.
An eagle falls in the space between us,

Knowing this storny ground

only amplifies the fall.
Love the whole symbolism, I figured the eagle iS this guys

heart,and tho u feel sorry 4 him, u cant relate to his pain, coz

probably u Hadnt been there or something.And his fall kindo gives

u wings.

In the confusion I soar, fighting the guilt of the eagle disowned

of giving flight to vision with wings not my own
In a twist of fate I am now falling fast towards stony ground

falling in-bwtween the space betwween you and...

....him
TIGHT!!! And your fall,gives another brother wings . . .Deep!!!!

I trust and believe the performance went down well.

You gifted man.You really gifted!!!!
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Sun Mar 05, 2006 4:55 pm

Yo Concrete ...honestly speaking, this kat iz on another level now, half the time I dont understand what he iz going on about.

Any ways here iz tha scoop , the compilation cd iz out [vol 1] that iz , and the only thing that iz missing is ...that Xtreme sanity up in there , but holler at your boy, YO!

Tell us when next you are going to be in town ,coz ...the shit iz on point [lable, logo and feat.artists and all ]

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check out psi-wolf[thats me] this iz beatmakerz sanctum....so tune in
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 9:00 am

Nicely written man!!

startin a new week with such mesmerizin stuff is amazing!!

keep on keepin on theme
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 12:35 pm

Word is Deep Theme. Nuff respek my brother. Imagery, was well created.

But, I'm a bit confused about them people in the piece. To me it's like there is a girl, u, and this other guy?. The question is about u and this other guy. I'm not sure who is who. But from what I interpreted, it's seems as if you are in a relationship with this girl, who seems appealling and all that, while she is actually something else. I felt that you were like a prisoner in the relationship (wanted some freedom so that you can get away from the realities you have been seeing and living with-her true colors) Once the other guy appears (the intruder) you quickly fly away, leaving him behind with the fake looks he was seeing. i also felt that you were the intruder who just realised that he has fallen into a trap- attractive person, who is not what she seems. but that is my interpretation. Please clarify, Word is deeep dawg.
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 12:59 pm

much love sinista, concrete and beesting...

actually this is how the poem goes...
Meeting you here, in the dark of day

An eagle falls in the space between us,

Knowing this storny ground

only amplifies the fall. It lies there, lifeless.
I am meeting this girl in the dark of day, because although it is in the afternoon, our meeting is not exactly legal as she still has issues she has to deal with before she goes into the relationship with me. There is an outstanding relationship she has been having but has now chosen to cut it off because of my appearance in the picture. The eagle which falls in the space between us is her current but soon to be dethroned boyfriend.
My first instinct is to nurseit,

But you protest

only to pick it up,

reach out for its fragile wings, plucking them hysterically,

ending its panoramic reverie.
I sympathise with the guy but she cannot have that and continues with removing him out of her life, ending his temporary flight/ exploration of her world.
Right then, half-excited, half-scared

I turn and run

gradually I feel the light-footedness, I am flying
Seeing this I am scared at once since the relationship is about to begin at somebody's expense so I attempt to flee before it begins, but it is too late...she had dispossed the other guy to give me the wings to fly into her world...
You have given me wings

In the confusion I soar, fighting the guilt of the eagle disowned

of giving flight to vision with wings not my own

but from your spot on the ground

you wave assurances, in love's dark sign language

You signal that wounded eagles soon learn how to fly again

Rescued by the enduring memory of luminous clouds

enveloping an interminable eternity of blue sky

As sure as the wind blows, they close their eyes

And soar....
It still does not satisfy me as I am guilty in the sense that there might still have been a chance for this guy, and I feel i might have taken advantage of the situation and triumphed to his disadvantage. But you assure me that he is going to be okay, once he rediscovers the goodness of love, he will love again...
So I watch you from up here

and it occurs to me, I cannot fly now

where you stand is my treading ground, our fortress,

So I quickly home in, enchanted, your image alluring, anticipating....
so I am now lost in you but I eventually realise the folly of flying up here, while I need to be connecting with you, so your image flashes back in my mind...your beauty overwhelms me afresh and I go back to idolising that aspect.
In a twist of fate I am now falling fast towards stony ground

falling in-bwtween the space betwween you and...

....him

His first instinct is to nurse me

You stop him, protesting

Only to pick me up, reach out for my fragile wings,

plucking my feathers, hysterically,

ending my panoramic reverie...I lie there lifeless

He turns to run

and gradually the light footedness...he is flying
in a twist of fate, I am also being subjected to the same process...she is soon cutting me off from the stem and giving a chance to another guy. Let me tell you the reason why. She gave each of us a chance to fly, to share her dream and realise the eagle in each one of us, but we instead chose to be tied down by her outer beauty instead of appreciating the strength inside her. So, stupidly, instead of choosing to soar with the wings her love gave us, we chose to home in to the qualities that had nothing to do with who she is. We chose not to fly.

She on the other hand does not give up giving guys the chance, she knows she will find the one who will soar and never look down, the one who will fly until he sees her in her completeness, resting upon a cloud, waiting for him...
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:07 pm

Nicely written man!!

startin a new week with such mesmerizin stuff is amazing!!

keep on keepin on theme
thank you for the confidence...from the depth of depths, I thank you B Spid3r
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Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:48 pm

in a twist of fate, I am also being subjected to the same process...she is soon cutting me off from the stem and giving a chance to another guy. Let me tell you the reason why. She gave each of us a chance to fly, to share her dream and realise the eagle in each one of us, but we instead chose to be tied down by her outer beauty instead of appreciating the strength inside her. So, stupidly, instead of choosing to soar with the wings her love gave us, we chose to home in to the qualities that had nothing to do with who she is. We chose not to fly.

She on the other hand does not give up giving guys the chance, she knows she will find the one who will soar and never look down, the one who will fly until he sees her in her completeness, resting upon a cloud, waiting for him...
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SH-T and i aint even thought o it that way, guess it also need

some skill when readin and understandin poetry, ITS JAS NOT,

What it seams on the outside, gat to read between the lines.
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