MY LOVE POEM(comments please)

[therapaddict]

i saw you glimmering like marigold/

1st to meet you but i really wanna pally yo/

you got me wanderin like d people of moses/

on takin u to love garden trips, chill among d roses/

never believed in love, let alone at first sight/

cupid made his best shot, gold arrow on ma heart/

now you always running on ma mind but it seems i never catch you/

you seem so far away but i believe i can still touch you/

say yes nd i will take you to ma love heaven/

i wanna fill the vacuum in your heart 2 4 seven/

say yes to me and dat will be ma biggst dream come true/

actions are louder dan words girl u should know i love you./[/b]

[therapaddict]

i need you all to comment

criticism to make me get corrected and props to encourage me.

[trusoul]

loved the concept

but please use proper spelling next time

keep it up

much love

true bless

trusoul

[Beesting]

Nice piece. But u better give that feedback as well.

[therapaddict]

thanks

i will work on dat

[Bongo]

[quote name="therapaddict"]i need you all to comment

criticism to make me get corrected and props to encourage me.[/quote]

nice n short...got me thinking!!! rly lykd it!!!

[therapaddict]

can't find words to describe the way i'm feelin,

even the north star's gonn' bow at the way you glimmering,

pretty like angelics, u surely from above,

and now i can boast of the true meanin to love,

how i wish my fingers could run the lines of you hair,

how i wish, i could, "while you cry" kiss you tears,

your smile is like a gentle breeze at d beach side,

blowin on me, and here i come to hold you hand,

[therapaddict]

u pretty like a bunch of roses, precious like a thousand pearls,

all day i could blow the whisper of love in ur ears,

your eyes remind me of the innocence of the inphants,

and the toons of your love i would never despise,