POTW: 25/01/06 Although I hav never seen her...

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linkris
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Sat Jan 21, 2006 7:14 pm

how u doing princess,

just felt like chatting even tho it's electronically,

it still feels as if u standing next to me

& verbally blessing me with your poetry

just wordz,but it moves me like waves in atlantic seas

feeling simultaneously strong but weak,ur essence got the best of me

like weed taken with extacy,but naturally "high"

i "scrape" the "sky" when your facial features cross my mind

as I freestyle,i shall rhyme extra lines cos you're worth the Xtra Mile

my sunshine,Linkris will swim the Nile just to witness you Smile

your lips is my home & im in exhile,but the Arrival

shall prevail cos my mental is more than a Survivor

my aim is to remain positive,but the "suspense" is a Bitch

wondering if you will be satisfied with your welcoming gifts

no-doubt,shes humble like poor people seeking shelter

knowing my heart is her home,no need for me to tell her

i dwell in realms,thinking i can smell her

waking up,covered in sweat,surrounded by heat,damn! i KNOW I FELT HER

tho i have never seen her...



criticism is wellcome,whether it's positive or negative...

im just explorin new routes...

peace...
linkris
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Sun Jan 22, 2006 10:40 am

kan n man terug_voering kry asseblief?

feed_back please...
linkris
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Sun Jan 22, 2006 2:25 pm

WOW...

This is beautiful link.. You've painted a lovely image for our minds to ponder and play with.

just wordz,but it moves me like waves in atlantic seas

feeling simultaneously strong but weak,ur essence got the best of me

like weed taken with extacy,but naturally "high"

i "scrape" the "sky" when your facial features cross my mind

as I freestyle,i shall rhyme extra lines cos you're worth the Xtra Mile

my sunshine,Linkris will swim the Nile just to witness you Smile

your lips is my home & im in exhile,but the Arrival


^^ I love that.. such a powerfully mellow serenade.

I'm so happy to see ya'll trying poetry out - I really digg what i'm reading thus far... really. Hope to have you blessing this forum more often yea.

Lets expand our horizonz and elevate blood :wink:

respect


thanx for the feed_back girl,it is appreciated-no_doubt :wink:
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Sun Jan 22, 2006 4:11 pm

heavy peice of work!!! i like the way u ended it off!!!

peace :!:
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Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:37 pm

to be honest..i wasnt expecting linkris to be here..thts all i can say... :lol:

deep tunnel of alphabetical minds.

.props
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Wed Jan 25, 2006 9:20 am

Dit was die shit Link. Lekker word play and imagery (especially that nile part). Do daai ding my bru[/quote]
linkris
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Wed Jan 25, 2006 8:40 pm

much respekt to u Addictive S & to all of the SPOKENWORD forum...

much luv :wink:
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