MY FREEDOM DREAM........

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TeeZeR
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Tue Nov 13, 2007 9:20 pm

Last night i gave into my sub-conscious.

I felt defeated by this endless dream...

i felt closer to my source, i knew my life had a course.

Light headed, cleansed and renewed i became.....

Cold shivers of happy fear danced down my spine

at the sight of this glorious light invading my eyes.

I became physically blind and surrendered to my third eye,

My soul's eye, My immortal eye.

I broke my optical virginity and lived a new reality.

I saw a faceless image, an ageless being,

who is one with end and beginning.
First time i see this piece. Eish me been sleeping too much! PROPS unto you ANTIKLOKWISE!

This i gotta say. I first read this and thought..."Jeah, I know exactly what you're talking about"! But as i went on, you took my thoughts and immensed them in water...i just had to be born again. Think again. Intriguing body content indeed. Gets one thinking and trying to sovle the puzzless puzzle. Nicely put qween.
Cold Shivers...happy fear...danced...sight of glorious light invading eyes...
I gotta give your imagery some props, i hope you didn't blow your head apart when putting these lines together. Sht!

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TeeZeR
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Tue Nov 13, 2007 9:34 pm

[quote name="Uncaged Thot"]I CNT SAY WRITING JST HAPPENS...U NEED TO HAVE SOME KNOWLEDGE ABOUT SOMETHING IN ORDER TO WRITE ABOUT IT. KNOWLEDGE NEEDS TO BE ACCOMPANIED WITH PASSION 4 IT TO BECOME A THOT ON A SHEET. I DNT GET HIGH TO WRITE BUT I MYT DO SO TO INSPIRE SHIT....BUT SHIT HAS TO BE IN YO HEAD ALREADY. WEED CNT MIRACULOUSLY PLANT INFO AND PASSION IN YO HEAD............[/quote]

On point people. To add, I think that you may also have:

- questions in your mind that you might not answer

- certain opinions you want to share OR

- picture that you want to draw/ make people understand.

It's all about defining what your purpose is for writing. By doing that I think you also enforce consistency in your writing. You can say you are either writing to inspire people, motivate, get them on the train of thought, make them understand you, hell...there can be a lot of reasons to write. It's all about putting effort to it and opening some room for criticism. We all have somethings to say but we cant reflect them in the same ways.
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Wed Jul 16, 2008 7:16 pm

Jeeeeeez!!, can't help uppin' this:
Into another state of mind i rose.

a state i call devine and unknown.

Light headed, cleansed and renewed i became.....

Feeling free from this world's deadly embrace i exhaled.......

Cold shivers of happy fear danced down my spine

at the sight of this glorious light invading my eyes.

I became physically blind and surrendered to my third eye,

My soul's eye, My immortal eye.
Have you ever dreamed, then in your dream elevated and painted your dream on the ceiling above u??!!...was this tha' case wit' u' Uncaged Thot?!
occipital
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Fri Jul 18, 2008 6:29 pm

true spoken word! word!!! saw yal talking about inspiration, i get mine from raggae music, experiences, people in the street and their experiences, sometimes it just comes and its like if i dont write i wont sleep or function, and i also think its knowlege as uncage wrote. you cant write about things you dont know about. and i think most of stuff is inspired by the fact that im a socialist. WORD TO CHE and all other freedom fighters and socialists. aknowlege!!!
occipital
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Fri Jul 18, 2008 6:29 pm

true spoken word! word!!! saw yal talking about inspiration, i get mine from raggae music, experiences, people in the street and their experiences, sometimes it just comes and its like if i dont write i wont sleep or function, and i also think its knowlege as uncage wrote. you cant write about things you dont know about. and i think most of stuff is inspired by the fact that im a socialist. WORD TO CHE and all other freedom fighters and socialists. aknowlege!!!
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Sun Jul 20, 2008 9:08 am

Man, i miss uncaged thot... I remember when she and her people from maftown came to my school... it was the most beautiful poetry session ever...
Third World Willy
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Tue Jul 22, 2008 6:08 pm

Here's mine:

"A Christian, an anarchist slash prostitute

Figures out the true meaning of freedom

Not freedom like America

Freedom like a shopping cart

Kick back, no tense

You got a bag of grub it cost you about 50 cents

No fear, no f**kin' kids

Warm beer tastes much better on the streets

Kick back, free meals

A couple of times a day you make a couple of shady deals

No work, no f**king pay

Cardboard condominium by the bay"

I'm too wise to trust what they call freedom.

TWW
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Wed Jul 23, 2008 3:30 am

[quote name="Uncaged Thot"]

I became physically blind and surrendered to my third eye,

My soul's eye, My immortal eye.

I broke my optical virginity and lived a new reality.

[/quote]

Do you know what those three lines just did to me?!? I think I just went crazy or something...Those three lines blew my mind. Thank you for this.
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Sat Jul 26, 2008 5:33 pm

[quote name="Uncaged Thot"]... I DNT GET HIGH TO WRITE BUT I MYT DO SO TO INSPIRE SHIT....BUT SHIT HAS TO BE IN YO HEAD ALREADY. WEED CNT MIRACULOUSLY PLANT INFO AND PASSION IN YO HEAD............[/quote]

True dat!!

You just got to get yourself inspired,

Listen and observe things with your third eye, you just might spot something you never seen b4, get exposed, and learn...

Dont force shit...it'll come to you!

Buh I got 2 agree, Uncaged Thot, your hot! On another level, dis is a classic peice.

Timeless, cud read it over n over agen!
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