HOLDING HANDS

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theme elohim
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Thu Aug 18, 2005 3:41 pm

Holding hands

is a gesture of goodwill

which on such a blistering afternoon

cannot appease the sore eye

I would rather were at war

for the mere fascination

of keeping with the infantile tradition

than challenge the world's attention

to a novelty as farcical

as a dungbeetle

intent on wheeling liquid stools

only to drown in them

who could believe we are brothers

we will only succeed

in exciting the fancies

of perverted men.
trusoul
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Mon Aug 22, 2005 2:30 pm

[quote name="theme elohim"]Holding hands

is a gesture of goodwill

which on such a blistering afternoon

cannot appease the sore eye

I would rather were at war

for the mere fascination

of keeping with the infantile tradition

than challenge the world's attention

to a novelty as farcical

as a dungbeetle

intent on wheeling liquid stools

only to drown in them

who could believe we are brothers

we will only succeed

in exciting the fancies

of perverted men.[/quote]

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my brother, when i think you can't go any higher you elevate it to even more dizzying heights

beautifully done

much love!!!!!!!!!

trusoul
theme elohim
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Mon Aug 22, 2005 4:02 pm

my brother, when i think you can't go any higher you elevate it to even more dizzying heights
I'm relieved you feel thatt way, i was aready thinking I messed it up by forgetting "we" in the following sentence, coz it should read...
I would rather we were at war
Blessings for giving me strength, TRU EMPRESS
trusoul
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Mon Aug 22, 2005 5:42 pm


I'm relieved you feel thatt way, i was aready thinking I messed it up by forgetting "we" in the following sentence
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mfowethu, i didn't even notice

i thought it was we're,

you still the man though!!!

much love!!!

trusoul
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Fri Aug 26, 2005 6:35 pm

Holding hands

is a gesture of goodwillof keeping with the infantile tradition
than challenge the world's attention
to a novelty as farcical

as a dungbeetle

intent on wheeling liquid stools

only to drown in them

who could believe we are brothers

we will only succeed

in exciting the fancies

of perverted men.
I loved it..
SHUT_EM_DOWN
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Sat Aug 27, 2005 12:02 pm

@THEME...

that was beautiful GOD...

respect...
theme elohim
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Mon Aug 29, 2005 3:29 pm

thanx y'all, much love. I think we should also make this as interactive as other forums, excet this wont be like the battles but more like giving insights and challenges to each other to enhance our worldview in terms of poetic expression.

trusoul, much love as usual Empress, xy_monk & SHUT_EM_DOWN, much much love
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