Unspoken Pain

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unheard voice
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Tue Aug 31, 2010 9:32 pm

I sat down and started to think

That was my first mistake

Because all the turmoil from my life

And of course everyone else's

Jus comes crashng in

I want to cry

Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's

I call my sister

I want to tell her how I'm feeling

But instead I get an earful

Devestation

That's how my life feels most times

Who's there for me?

Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?

When I can't figure out a solution to my problems

Why must everyone come to me??
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Wed Sep 01, 2010 1:06 pm

Damn!...now this is a stressed piece!...I feel the pain in it, the emotions n' all that...n' that's the beauty of poetry. It feels like you wrote this in a spar of a moment...at the correct timing, that's why it came out jus' fine!
tha high priest
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Sat Sep 04, 2010 7:44 pm

yeah its touchin a bit sad.sm times thoughts get to heavy but keep writtin it actually helps lessen the weight on yo brain n keep yo head up.
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Wed Sep 08, 2010 4:27 pm

this is another one describing how sometimes sadness find us no matter how we try being happy

guess it's all about this life vicissitudes....u brought the picture out clearly and big-up 4 that

unheard voice!!!
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 12:57 am

I like the title... and the poem does nail it.
I sat down and started to think

That was my first mistake
I can relate to that... sometimes we curse why we put ideas into our own heads... we shud just proceed with the flow

Nice piece bro
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Fri Oct 29, 2010 8:29 pm

I sat down and started to think

That was my first mistake

Because all the turmoil from my life

And of course everyone else's

Jus comes crashng in

[/quote]
I want to cry

Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's[/quote]
I call my sister

I want to tell her how I'm feeling

But instead I get an earful

Devestation

That's how my life feels most times

Who's there for me?

Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?

When I can't figure out a solution to my problems

Why must everyone come to me??
unheard voice
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Sun Oct 31, 2010 2:42 am

thanks for the support everyone. I actually wroe this at a time wen it felt like everything was crashing in... my twin sister and i have sperated for the 1st time cus we go 2 different universities and i felt like i had no one to talk to about everything that was goin on in my, as well as some family that comes to me for advice, life... this was a great release... glad u guys like it!
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Tue Jan 04, 2011 12:10 pm

hypothetical poetry manifest.

i believe writing when you are wedged in the thick of an emotion is.. this... poetry.

blessed be.

Honour

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Wed Jan 05, 2011 10:50 am

:-) Wow. and that is why you are a poet. Poets bear the burdens of others. And they can talk to a paper and after that feel better. Consoled by our own words? hmm...?
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