Pardon my language

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thaddaeus
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Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:43 pm

Lonely nights,they begin to to play

on a situated thought to specific to to say

so go away,and leave me be...

Keep fucking with me life and your gone catch a disease
Poetic Seraph
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Thu Jul 01, 2010 12:47 am

uhm ok.... short....like a single thought that happened to rhyme...
eizzy.k
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Mon Jan 17, 2011 4:23 pm

short but its got a certain bite to it...like a warning to back the f*ck up...
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Tue Jan 25, 2011 3:42 pm

i think it says all it needs to say.. its like a short film, you set the mood well and and you end it well. you tell all that needs to be told without beating around the bush.

i still have the picture in my head. permision to turn this into a short film script? brilliant!

honour

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Thu Jan 27, 2011 5:56 am

I love that this poem is so short. It's like you say what you have to say, straight to the point and it packs so much power.
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