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Poetic Seraph
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Fri Apr 24, 2009 12:04 pm

We’ll sit on the edge of the mountain top

Ignoring the sounds of the world beneath us

Histories will burn in the fire of senseless memories

And I will catch your tears and place them on the sky

Tales of pain will be recited endlessly

By silver stars up in heaven

An eternal picture, painted by you and me

We’ll get lost in the space between never and forever

Time will watch us

As the moon will finally embrace the sun

I will hold your hand as our last journey has begun

And as my oxygen will become your oxygen

Fear not, my love

Because with our last breathe

We’ll finally become … one

Copyright 2009 Poetic Seraph
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Fri Apr 24, 2009 12:44 pm

first time reading a piece from you and i already feel suicidal. tight
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Sat Apr 25, 2009 10:59 am

[quote name="cornelius"]first time reading a piece from you and i already feel suicidal. tight[/quote]get thorough wit this board cornelius, n' I can bet u' gon' get hooked to her poems like a "drug".

Seraph, Seraph...why did u' have to mention anything to do with the universe in this piece?...n' u' jus did it the way I like it...thats my weakness!!!...

...this is a sick concept, catchin' topic n' ill content...I need not say more but quote this:[quote name="Poetic Seraph"]We’ll sit on the edge of the mountain top

Ignoring the sounds of the world beneath us

Histories will burn in the fire of senseless memories

And I will catch your tears and place them on the sky

Tales of pain will be recited endlessly

By silver stars up in heaven

An eternal picture, painted by you and me

We’ll get lost in the space between never and forever

Time will watch us

As the moon will finally embrace the sun

I will hold your hand as our last journey has begun

And as my oxygen will become your oxygen

Fear not, my love

Because with our last breathe

We’ll finally become … one[/quote] :D
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Sat Apr 25, 2009 6:42 pm

Beautiful imagery...

there is a sense of escapism, which helps hint and build up to the ending;

"Ignoring the sounds of the world beneath us...We’ll get lost in the space between never and forever"

I like the romantic slant the poem has about suicide, which is usually quite depressing...reminds me of those pact suicides people sometimes make...

what inspired this Poetic Seraph?
Poetic Seraph
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Sun Apr 26, 2009 3:42 pm

thanks peeps. This is a poem that just grew on me. I been playing with the concept of catching tears and putting them on the sky as stars for a lil bit and the poem just grew on me. i could see the people sitting on the edge of the mountain top, I knew I wanted a romantic poem, then the whole commiting suicide together seemed like the most romantic yet craziest idea and that's how the poem grew on me :)
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Mon Apr 27, 2009 4:37 pm

i think ps and Couz should collabo on a piece about universe, suicidal dope
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Tue Apr 28, 2009 9:40 pm

First of all, WOWWW!

I wanted to cry because the poem to me depicted "Til death do us part" an ultimate love story for sure. although the poem is of suicide, it was not morbid in the least but calming, as though it could be a good thing. almost convinced me to want to take that journey. Deep.
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Wed Apr 29, 2009 4:52 pm

[quote name="Couzifer"]..why did u' have to mention anything to do with the universe in this piece?...n' u' jus did it the way I like it...[/quote]

[quote name="eizzy.k"]Beautiful imagery...

there is a sense of escapism, which helps hint and build up to the ending;[/quote]

More like sums it up for me. Nice one indeed Seraph!
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Thu May 07, 2009 3:01 pm

don't you ever wish you could look into sumbody's mind.... Poetic Seraph is one such being, i wanna look into her mind. and maybe steal and innocent kiss. I wanna kiss her mind so so passionately... ha ha ha ha

Great piece Seraph... kinda gave me the chills. :mrgreen:
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Mon May 11, 2009 3:41 pm

i cant add more. this is a good poem.
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