The Boomerang Trail

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Ghostic
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Wed Mar 11, 2009 6:10 pm

Excessive lending and concession, now excessive recession

Excessive aggression was built in Mr. Robin following his loss

his job was lost and was advised not to bother looking for it

Robin thought of robbing as his hands caressed Stella*

intoxicated by her beer, he became a staggering bottle

waiters didn’t want him to hang-over with his hangover

they drove him, he drove fast, Stella caressing him all over

trying to bend over at a sharp turn but didn’t see Landrover

that was driven by Mrs Wicker still mourning her husband

so both drivers swerved over the bridge to meet her husband

Mrs Wicker’s toddlers were then raised by two husbands

daughter graduated in porn, son became a street pharmacist

who sold drugs to a wealthy but sick airplane engineer

who took drugs on duty, screwing his brain, unscrewing nuts

so nuts he was, he left the plane unsafe for three hundred

these hundreds had to depend on the pilot for a safe landing

but the plane landing wasn’t a smooth and plane landing

ending the lives of passengers including a health-aid surgeon

depriving Sudan war-victims of his voluntary health care

so more Sudanese die,war gets intense,killing some whites

one luckily survives, quits and gets home for treatment

he loves strippers,he inserts his dick & AIDS into Wicker’s girl

she’s sick and vows to AID more men with death thru AIDS

so she fucks Tom,Dick and Harry and these are the people

who started the excessive lending...

*Stella here refers to a particular beer called Stella Artois.

ONE!
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 4:04 pm

[quote name="Ghostic"]waiters didn’t want him to hang-over with his hangover

they drove him, he drove fast, Stella caressing him all over

trying to bend over at a sharp turn but didn’t see Landrover

that was driven by Mrs Wicker still mourning her husband

so both drivers swerved over the bridge to meet her husband
[/quote]

C'est magnifique, mon ami!

I see the boomerang trail in all the events...pretty evocative piece!
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 5:50 pm

Sick, I have read this piece a couple of times now, sick wordplay, I have said it before but man u' jus' got this ability to create poetry from anything, even the unimaginable...yeah thats the beauty of it.[quote name="Ghostic"]Mrs Wicker’s toddlers were then raised by two husbands

daughter graduated in porn, son became a street pharmacist

who sold drugs to a wealthy but sick airplane engineer

who took drugs on duty, screwing his brain, unscrewing nuts

so nuts he was, he left the plane unsafe for three hundred


these hundreds had to depend on the pilot for a safe landing

but the plane landing wasn’t a smooth and plane landing

ending the lives of passengers including a health-aid surgeon

depriving Sudan war-victims of his voluntary health care

so more Sudanese die
,war gets intense,killing some whites

one luckily survives, quits and gets home for treatment

he loves strippers,he inserts his d*ck & AIDS into Wicker’s girl

she’s sick and vows to AID more men with death thru AIDS

so she fucks Tom,d*ck and Harry and these are the people

who started the excessive lending
...[/quote]Sheyt mayne..are u talkin' about the global economic meltdown?

On point.
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Thu Mar 12, 2009 11:03 pm

this piece is amazing, I cosign with Couz on how u keep just creating poetry out of nothing. I can see one event happening and it leading to a strain of events that seem not related but all occured from this one event that happened in the beginning. U know, the theory about a butterfly creating a hurricane on the other side of the world. hot hot hot
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Fri Mar 13, 2009 8:35 am

ow, dude, i like the rhyme scheme. Saw something like it first with Couzi. The rhyme at the end of a line comes at the begining of/directs the next. U executed it skillfully.

domino effect. luvd the theme.
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Sat Mar 14, 2009 2:55 pm

Thanks y'all...thanks for the love!

Ehyo Revolt,I hope the 'kid' you referred to means me being a kid in poetry, because in reality I am far from one. :)

One love!
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Sat Mar 14, 2009 3:31 pm

[quote name="Ghostic"]Ehyo Revolt,I hope the 'kid' you referred to means me being a kid in poetry[/quote]kid in poetry?...sheyt mayne...u's a ma'fuckin gawd!!!
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Sun Mar 15, 2009 1:10 am

You need to see the size of my head now. :D
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Tue Mar 17, 2009 3:03 pm

WOW

I was like Boomerang Trail uhm sounds interesting , (expecting some safari piece or an adventure of somesort) then I started reading it and I was lost, lost on the BOOMERANG TRAIL

Nice Write :wink:
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