[quote name="eizzy.k"]I turn the shower on
And let the water drip, slip, down into the drain
Washing away the day’s remains.
Limp limbs hanging heavy
Nice intro, it took me into the shower with you, I like the way you hind at what the end will be like in these first few lines . . .
Can’t hold onto my thoughts
Like water through fingers, dripping
Briliant metaphor . . .
I release a sigh,
That comes out a cry
And sounds hollow
I was left in awe by your wordplay here . . .
Washing my body,
Cleansing my soul,
As I am physically mentally emotionally
And then of cause what makes every poem, a conclusive ending.
All and all a very nice write,
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