It's Getting Late

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PassionatePisces
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Wed Aug 27, 2008 6:48 pm

Darkness arises over you and I... my light is gone

Baby don't you know that it's gettin late

I took the time to contemplate... Just ten more minutes, a lifetime,

to gaze in his eyes...

I wanna know his soul & caress his spirit with mine, a life time,

Feel his affliction, he's so cold

Tho arrested in his embrace I feel so warm... Damn

The minutes have not stopped turning into hours nor the hours into days

and nor has my heart stopped beating for his love

Baby don't you know that it's getting late...

How much longer do you plan on shutting me out,

Out of your deepest thought and desires...

Why won't you let me all the way in I'm trying to be one with you

But how can we... continue like this, how can I?

It's getting late, No longer must I contemplate
ralstone15
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Wed Aug 27, 2008 7:30 pm

wow SUCH PASSION...

"I took the time to contemplate... Just ten more minutes, a lifetime,

to gaze in his eyes...

I wanna know his soul & caress his spirit with mine, a life time,

Feel his affliction, he's so cold

Tho arrested in his embrace I feel so warm...

i wish someone felt that way about me!
eizzy.k
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Fri Aug 29, 2008 3:49 pm

Nice one!

some people tend not to hold on to the good in their life until its too late...you can't wait for them forever, eh?

I liked the repetition of "Baby don't you know that it's gettin late" then the line "It's getting late, No longer must I contemplate" , almost makes it sound like a song...

best lines:

[quote name="PassionatePisces"]

Feel his affliction, he's so cold

Tho arrested in his embrace I feel so warm... Damn

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LoL, i can hear the "Daaaim"
brooks
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Fri Aug 29, 2008 5:31 pm

[quote name="eizzy.k"]Nice one!

some people tend not to hold on to the good in their life until its too late...you can't wait for them forever, eh?

same words here! but u will be surprised how long you will be willing to wait! nice piece sir! welcome to AHH :!:
Dark Prince
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Mon Sep 01, 2008 7:17 am

I can take from this the thought-play it took to create such passion with imagery with words, keep writing
squid
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Fri Sep 05, 2008 5:24 pm

Feel his affliction, he's so cold

Tho arrested in his embrace I feel so warm... Damn
this was an advise to all and like brooks said"but u will be surprised how long you will be willing to wait"one thing i know is that the heart is not so smart.
Poetic Seraph
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Sun Sep 07, 2008 4:45 pm

the heart is def not too smart. it's like a 'feeling good in drama' junkie hahaha

the piece is very nice. very sweet and longing, yet realistic enough to come to the conclusion that u can't be the only one fighting for a relationship. looking forward to more of ur work. just make sure u give feedback to 3 other pieces before posting ur own. gotta stick to the rules to keep this place active
1thought2many
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Wed Oct 08, 2008 12:14 am

hhahahh.. That was hot aswell..

PassionatePisces... It fits..
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Wed Oct 15, 2008 5:13 pm

yeah no doubt...the passion is heavy in that! you b a good writer!
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