you cant compete with her
'cause i like her,
and unlike her, complete you are.
a finished piece, finite.
I rub her, at will, and reposition her.
a perfect blend of intellect and ignorance.
her perfectness intricate enough
to make me laugh about my impotence
She blows my mind
with those lips that speak my silent languages
when my heart's violent she lies calm, under my arm,
her weightless head rests over my heart
she understands the vibrant sullenness
in it. It soothes my hurt conditions.
when i need you i need her more
after your kiss i need a moment
with her. An urge to rub that magic lamp and bring her out;
the other woman i dream about.
you cant be shelved with her.
selfish, it may make
you, but i swore myself to her
She's a part of me, the me you say you love.
the other woman
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incase ya'l stil wonderin. u cant divorce poetry for her(or him) Your most intense moment is spent with this other woman. Seraph told ya never to date us. 
I like it man, yeah! its well thought and dopely metaphor ed . I love poetry, it aint a lie!
One!
One!
[quote name="vnorm"]incase ya'l stil wonderin. u cant divorce poetry for her(or him) Your most intense moment is spent with this other woman. Seraph told ya never to date us. [/quote]
you sure cant vnorm, thats impossible
[/quote]you sure cant vnorm, thats impossible
thanks Brooks n Couz. I appreciate the feed
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I really like this piece... makes me wanna put da pen back in my hand
i apreciate that homz. its among my fav too
Damn!
these are my fav lines...
[quote name="vnorm"]
you cant compete with her
'cause i like her,
and unlike her, complete you are.
a finished piece, finite.
I rub her, at will, and reposition her.
a perfect blend of intellect and ignorance.
her perfectness intricate enough
to make me laugh about my impotence
She blows my mind
with those lips that speak my silent languages
when my heart's violent she lies calm, under my arm,
her weightless head rests over my heart
she understands the vibrant sullenness
in it. It soothes my hurt conditions.
when i need you i need her more
after your kiss i need a moment
with her. An urge to rub that magic lamp and bring her out;
the other woman i dream about.
you cant be shelved with her.
selfish, it may make
you, but i swore myself to her
She's a part of me, the me you say you love.[/quote]
Guess i love the whole piece! Your lines are tight, no better combination, no better way to discribe her...
The fellas want her the ladies admire her...
i'm in awe...i'm really feeling this.
mad respect!!
to u, but more to her...
these are my fav lines...
[quote name="vnorm"]
you cant compete with her
'cause i like her,
and unlike her, complete you are.
a finished piece, finite.
I rub her, at will, and reposition her.
a perfect blend of intellect and ignorance.
her perfectness intricate enough
to make me laugh about my impotence
She blows my mind
with those lips that speak my silent languages
when my heart's violent she lies calm, under my arm,
her weightless head rests over my heart
she understands the vibrant sullenness
in it. It soothes my hurt conditions.
when i need you i need her more
after your kiss i need a moment
with her. An urge to rub that magic lamp and bring her out;
the other woman i dream about.
you cant be shelved with her.
selfish, it may make
you, but i swore myself to her
She's a part of me, the me you say you love.[/quote]
Guess i love the whole piece! Your lines are tight, no better combination, no better way to discribe her...
The fellas want her the ladies admire her...
i'm in awe...i'm really feeling this.
mad respect!!
to u, but more to her...
[quote name="eizzy.k"]mad respect!!
to u, but more to her...[/quote]
thank you, said poetry.
'uh, whatever', said vnorm 8)
to u, but more to her...[/quote]
thank you, said poetry.
'uh, whatever', said vnorm 8)
i totally been there cuz this hit hoe i mean home lol lol
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