the other woman

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vnorm
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Mon Aug 18, 2008 1:48 pm

you cant compete with her

'cause i like her,

and unlike her, complete you are.

a finished piece, finite.

I rub her, at will, and reposition her.

a perfect blend of intellect and ignorance.

her perfectness intricate enough

to make me laugh about my impotence

She blows my mind

with those lips that speak my silent languages

when my heart's violent she lies calm, under my arm,

her weightless head rests over my heart

she understands the vibrant sullenness

in it. It soothes my hurt conditions.

when i need you i need her more

after your kiss i need a moment

with her. An urge to rub that magic lamp and bring her out;

the other woman i dream about.

you cant be shelved with her.

selfish, it may make

you, but i swore myself to her

She's a part of me, the me you say you love.
vnorm
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Mon Aug 18, 2008 1:53 pm

incase ya'l stil wonderin. u cant divorce poetry for her(or him) Your most intense moment is spent with this other woman. Seraph told ya never to date us. :D
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Mon Aug 18, 2008 3:52 pm

I like it man, yeah! its well thought and dopely metaphor ed . I love poetry, it aint a lie!

One!
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Tue Aug 19, 2008 12:30 pm

[quote name="vnorm"]incase ya'l stil wonderin. u cant divorce poetry for her(or him) Your most intense moment is spent with this other woman. Seraph told ya never to date us. :D [/quote]

you sure cant vnorm, thats impossible :D
vnorm
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Fri Aug 22, 2008 4:13 pm

thanks Brooks n Couz. I appreciate the feed
PassionatePisces
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Wed Aug 27, 2008 5:03 pm

I really like this piece... makes me wanna put da pen back in my hand
vnorm
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Mon Sep 01, 2008 11:15 am

i apreciate that homz. its among my fav too
eizzy.k
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 7:39 pm

Damn!

these are my fav lines...

[quote name="vnorm"]

you cant compete with her

'cause i like her,

and unlike her, complete you are.

a finished piece, finite.

I rub her, at will, and reposition her.

a perfect blend of intellect and ignorance.

her perfectness intricate enough

to make me laugh about my impotence

She blows my mind

with those lips that speak my silent languages

when my heart's violent she lies calm, under my arm,

her weightless head rests over my heart

she understands the vibrant sullenness

in it. It soothes my hurt conditions.

when i need you i need her more

after your kiss i need a moment

with her. An urge to rub that magic lamp and bring her out;

the other woman i dream about.

you cant be shelved with her.

selfish, it may make

you, but i swore myself to her

She's a part of me, the me you say you love.[/quote]

Guess i love the whole piece! Your lines are tight, no better combination, no better way to discribe her...

The fellas want her the ladies admire her...

i'm in awe...i'm really feeling this.

mad respect!!

to u, but more to her...
vnorm
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Mon Dec 08, 2008 4:56 pm

[quote name="eizzy.k"]mad respect!!

to u, but more to her...[/quote]

thank you, said poetry.

'uh, whatever', said vnorm 8)
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Mon Dec 08, 2008 6:51 pm

i totally been there cuz this hit hoe i mean home lol lol
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