The F*cking Heat!

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floetic_soul
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 7:38 am

Hey AHH! Long time no see my poetic peoples! Hopefully we are all healthy and blessed. Well, this is The F*cking Heat. I

The F*cking Heat!

Damn.

It is hot.

This heat beats down my spine

like a flaming whip that beats my back

burning my flesh in the process.

My skin seems to BOIL in this f*cking heat!

I'm sweating bullets.

I can taste the sweat

as it trickles into my mouth

some of it dripping off my lips.

down my neck.

onto my chest.

The taste of sweat is like the taste of blood.

Salty.

Acidic.

It BURNS the back of my throat.

It's inescapable!

It's UNBEARABLE!

My eyes seem to burn in this f*cking heat!

Scorching them red.

Drying every liquid

on the surface of my iris.

AGH I can't help but scream in agony!

Isn't anyone going to help me!?

The humidity.

It just swells my hair

and dries my scalp.

It suffocates my air.

Thinner and

Thinner.

Till i can't breathe any more!

I can't think straight!

I can't speak straight!

Just get me out of this f*cking heat!

CAN'T YOU HEAR ME?!

Please just get me out of this f*cking heat!

Please.

Just.

Help.

Me.
Couzifer
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 9:52 am

Damn am tired!!, yeah! this poem feels like a heavy load right on ma' back and i guess thats its intention!, simple and to tha' point. Nice drop, can't wait for the other poems.
Poetic Seraph
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 11:08 am

Floetic, where have u been? Doesn't really matter, cuz u came back with a killer drop!!! I could feel myself breaking out in a sweat. Great piece, can't wait to read the other.
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 5:26 pm

The poem gave a lot of heat and i was sweating all over.its nice reading this piece brother.Damn its hot!!
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 5:39 pm

damn i hope you are a new bee coz if you are not, we new bees are missing on a lot.this is simple and clear to the point am watching this space for the next release.keep it coming
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 9:25 pm

This f*cken heat? honestly for me the poem was like a plot for some maxican movie. but i like it, its fresh and a new angle to spoken word. keep it up
floetic_soul
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Wed Jul 09, 2008 1:59 am

haha. a mexican movie plot. I really appreciate the feedback. I actually got some people sweatin lol. Ill put the next one up sometime within the next few hours.

For Seraph: I've been around, I come by every now and then to read and digest some greatness. I'll be around more often now that i got more chill time and Ill be posting feedback as well as material. Working on something as I speak.
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Thu Jul 10, 2008 3:25 am

[quote name="floetic_soul"]

Isn't anyone going to help me!?

The humidity.

It just swells my hair

and dries my scalp.

It suffocates my air.

Thinner and

Thinner.

............................................

Please.

Just.

Help.

Me.[/quote]

It all seems like one sentence to me.

Your drop is cool no doubt, but as for the structure,I don't know about that...such a unique style and to be honest I wasn't feeling the structure...it's just my opinion,ok.I believe poetry is distinguised from essay writting by the presence of some rhythm and flow...

Seems you haven't written in a while.

One love, poet!
floetic_soul
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Thu Jul 10, 2008 6:40 am

Yea honestly I wasn't sure where I was going with structure lol. I mean it might have sounded right in myhead but I guess I was tryna convey how "heat" can disorient you to the point of desperation and alittle insanity. I could have put some commas in there though now that I think about it. Maybe the periods was alittle overboard lol. Thanks Ghostic I'll be sure to take that into consideration during the final draft.
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Thu Jul 10, 2008 9:10 am

Sounded very hot!!

Are you, by chance, talking about sex? :¿
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