[quote name="theme elohim"]From now lurks the moment, behind the boils of time when the arm seldom tightens around the body, when self shies away from itself but no other door to usher it in. The needles on the door of tomorrow bid me knock, upon entrance the needles on the floor bid me tread.[/quot...

my man i found it :!: , i'll crit it soon :!: ,

i'm really snowed under with work right now ,

what i've already felt is good :!:

much love

true bless

trusoul

nicely done for your first, good subject

your imagery did good, rhythm was sublime

though your word use could get better

keep practising

i loved it

much love

true bless

trusoul

[quote name="illuminati"]I woke up in the mid of no where I screamed and screamed but there was no one near, So I ran accross the void hoping to find someone there, found no one except emptiness, loneliness and fear, that feeling which was my greatest scare, slapped my face like stench from a market...

[quote name="theme elohim"]

(May I please please get your comment on the piece "From Now Lurks The Moment?)[/quote]

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thanx a lot for the feedback EVERYONE,

you get me going

much love

true bless

trusoul

PS: WHERE IS IT????????????????

i am lion, woman-ness here my roar in tireless appreciation of how impressed you are.like the empress i am truly to press under no great duress my thanking forever under humbling the love of writing to friends loving and appreciating never avoiding God's talent's. ************** thanks everone much ...

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